Harry longs to come home but once there, he doesn't take a moment to enjoy it?! Having Harry seek out his favorite food (crab sandwich on the pier) or hangout or location would have helped make him more likeable. Ask Libby to skip work for a day and have fun, but then he's unable to have fun because he feels that he's in the wrong place. (So many people don't like him because he's so bland.)
Skip the ankle bracelet and chase. Too boring because so commonplace.
Skip the "no proof" line because Harry could tell them way more about Voyageur, the crew, and the accident than any spy could learn. Plus, he's wearing his communicator badge the entire time. Is it identical or not?
Would be far more interesting if Star Fleet joined in trying to solve the riddle because then there could be interesting discussions about time and reality! Then create REAL SUBSTANTIVE CONFLICT when Harry wants to restore the timeline but Star Fleet believes that they are the correct timeline and don't want it altered. Harry must then find a way around whatever roadblocks Star Fleet puts up. (Something more plausible and interesting than an ankle bracelet and a nonsensical chase when they could simply beam him to a holding cell.) Include pilot Tom, but it could be Harry's research partner who is convinced to help Harry and gives him access to the shuttle that Star Fleet blocked.
How boring was discovery of the alien?! Harry could have become suspicious. "Why do you know me so well? I've never gotten to know a shop owner or server so well before. You're always outside when I walk by, no matter the time of day! Do you know more than you're telling me?"
Was missing discussion of whether he changed his timeline or he moved to another timeline. I don't see why his timeline would change. It felt like he was transported through time to another timeline, so there should have been two Harry Kims in San Francisco. Because there is only one of him would be the reason to believe that his timeline changed and should be changed back.
Missed opportunity to learn about the efforts that Star Fleet had taken to try to contact Voyager. If we assume that they tried the same thing in both timelines, then Harry could bring some new information to Voyager.
So many ways that this could have been made more interesting.
Skip the ankle bracelet and chase. Too boring because so commonplace.
Skip the "no proof" line because Harry could tell them way more about Voyageur, the crew, and the accident than any spy could learn. Plus, he's wearing his communicator badge the entire time. Is it identical or not?
Would be far more interesting if Star Fleet joined in trying to solve the riddle because then there could be interesting discussions about time and reality! Then create REAL SUBSTANTIVE CONFLICT when Harry wants to restore the timeline but Star Fleet believes that they are the correct timeline and don't want it altered. Harry must then find a way around whatever roadblocks Star Fleet puts up. (Something more plausible and interesting than an ankle bracelet and a nonsensical chase when they could simply beam him to a holding cell.) Include pilot Tom, but it could be Harry's research partner who is convinced to help Harry and gives him access to the shuttle that Star Fleet blocked.
How boring was discovery of the alien?! Harry could have become suspicious. "Why do you know me so well? I've never gotten to know a shop owner or server so well before. You're always outside when I walk by, no matter the time of day! Do you know more than you're telling me?"
Was missing discussion of whether he changed his timeline or he moved to another timeline. I don't see why his timeline would change. It felt like he was transported through time to another timeline, so there should have been two Harry Kims in San Francisco. Because there is only one of him would be the reason to believe that his timeline changed and should be changed back.
Missed opportunity to learn about the efforts that Star Fleet had taken to try to contact Voyager. If we assume that they tried the same thing in both timelines, then Harry could bring some new information to Voyager.
So many ways that this could have been made more interesting.